Maiden Voyage

 

 

Fifty-two tons, one of the unsinkable ones

The proud flag ship of the White Star Line

With Captain Smith true and a seasoned crew

Left Queenstown for the New York skyline

 

But the captain didn’t know that the fires below

Were more than the common occurrence

The hull became frail in the miles they sailed

In the end, that would make all the difference

 

The lookouts worked hard, the only light stars

On a night that was cold and forbidding

But they did not see the iceberg set free

Hidden beneath still seas unforgiving

 

Then it was too late to avoid their fate

As ghostly ice gouged the hull wide and deep

The stokers knew first, as steel bulkheads burst

They were headed to an eternal sleep

 

The tragic fail, lifeboats hung at the rail

Hoped salvation that could not be lowered

And as water rushed in, raising panic and din

The North Sea came for what was owed her

 

What sealed their fate, how light scintillates

As scared signalman flashes passing ship

Distant twinkling light on such a starry night

Not seen as beyond horizon they slipped

 

The sea it is said, never gives up her dead

Tragic souls are gathered like plunder

But in the demise, saved spirits do rise

As the behemoth slowly slips under

 

There below the waves, the ones left unsaved

As what they said could never happen did

An icy deep shrine, forgotten to time

Where all the mariner’s failures stay hid

 

 

 

Comments
16 Responses to “Maiden Voyage”
  1. What amazing work this poem is! Having seen the movie Titanic more than once, your words described the actual visualizations that were on the screen! I am beyond WOWWED!

    • Brad Osborne says:

      Thank you dear sister! Putting any humility on hold for a moment, I think this is one of my strongest endeavors. I have submitted it for publication, but that is always an iffy situation. I would settle for a receptive response here and worry that anything less may be crushing to my spirit. So, thank you for being so reassuring!

  2. kristianw84 says:

    BRAD!!!!!! ❤ ❤ ❤ This is friggin' AMAZING!!!!!! I loved the story like flow throughout the poem, the visual images it brought forth in my mind were heart wrenching. You are excellent at inflicting emotions. Beautifully done!! Bravo!!

    • Brad Osborne says:

      Thank you so kindly for checking it out. I had hoped I hit on something, but I never really know anymore. I needed your sounding board before I got silly and queried anyone about publication. Thanks for all your kindnesses! ❤

      • kristianw84 says:

        I definitely think you should look into publication, this truly is amazing and pulls on the heartstrings, I think it’s something everyone can relate to. I mean, everyone knows the story of the Titanic!! You have no reason to doubt yourself, Brad. You’re writing is incredible and you are a master of words, but I get it. I struggle with it too, I never quite know if my writing is as good as I hope it is. Feel free to email me any time you want a second set of eyes. I’d be happy to help, and if you’re interested, maybe do a collaboration one day! ❤

      • Brad Osborne says:

        Thank you! I knew you would understand the difficulty in determining if some success lies within your words. I will certainly take advantage of your offer for a second pair of eyes, and a beautiful pair they are. And, I would love to do a collaboration one day. I am excited at the idea. You focus on work for now and we will get together when things calm. But I won’t let you forget. 😊

      • kristianw84 says:

        Yes, please feel free to remind me. Things will calm down in mid April, so maybe we can plan for then! And thank you for the sweet compliment, my friend! ❤

  3. jonicaggiano says:

    Nicely done Brad. You can-envision the chaos taking place and fill the frigid cold of the water. Great poetic phrases. Love ya Joni

  4. Jim Borden says:

    wonderful poem; I wish you the best with your submission!

  5. Wow! Beautiful Brad, a great homage to the Titanic, with tremendous images and a vivid reminder of such a tragic event. Great work my friend!

  6. jupitergrant says:

    Amazing work!! 💓

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