Whittled Words – Concrete Poem
Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:
CONCRETE POEM
Concrete poetry, sometimes referred to as ‘sculpted poetry’, is one of the more experimental poetic forms available to poets. Concrete poems use structure and space to communicate the meaning of the words as a visual representation. In this way, concrete poetry is one of the most visual poetic forms.
These shapely poems can be read apart from their forced visual form and still be understood clearly. However, the shape is meant to add to the beauty, not detract from it. Of course, concrete poetry has plenty of detractors because of the weight structure has on the words, but as much thought goes into concrete poetry as any other form.
There are no requirements for this form. And, although it is an open form of poetry, the creative poet can find a way to include meter or rhyme scheme should they wish. The hardest part for me was finding a way to create the desired shape while writing within a standard word processing software. Takes a little time, good word choices, and a bit of creative editing, like additional spaces between words to hold the shape of one line to the next.
Examples of Concrete Poems:
EASTER WINGS
by George Herbert
Lord, who createdst man in wealth and store,
Though foolishly he lost the same,
Decaying more and more,
Till he became
Most poore:
With thee
O let me rise
As larks, harmoniously,
And sing this day thy victories:
Then shall the fall further the flight in me.
My tender age in sorrow did beginne
And still with sicknesses and shame.
Thou didst so punish sinne,
That I became
Most thinne.
With thee
Let me combine,
And feel thy victorie:
For, if I imp my wing on thine,
Affliction shall advance the flight in me.
SONNET IN THE SHAPE OF A POTTED CHRISTMAS TREE
By George Starbuck
*
O
fury-
bedecked!
O glitter-torn!
Let the wild wind erect
bonbonbonanzas; junipers affect
frostyfreeze turbans; iciclestuff adorn
all cuckolded creation in a madcap crown of horn!
It’s a new day; no scapegrace of a sect
tidying up the ashtrays playing Daughter-in-Law Elect;
bells! bibelots! popsicle cigars! shatter the glassware! a son born
now
now
while ox and ass and infant lie
together as poor creatures will
and tears of her exertion still
cling in the spent girl’s eye
and a great firework in the sky
drifts to the western hill.
ARLINGTON
By Brad Osborne
Alabaster markers
perfectly aligned,
where those who
willing gave a life
now lie enshrined.
The many names
of the bravest women and men are carved in stone and
remembered then. The sons and daughters, the husbands
and wives, who for their country gave their lives. Freedom
born in their sacrifice. Cherished gift bought with highest
price. The souls laid to rest in long, neat rows. A final and
fatal honor given in the tears that flow. A salted dew falls
on the grass. And,
winds of war blow
from our conflicts
past. As far as the
living eye can see,
our heroes sleep
in their reverie. We
live on by grace but
they do not. They
have earned their
hallowed resting
spot. And guarded
by a soldier alone,
is a monument to
the ones unknown.
I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Concrete poem. Thanks for reading!
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In any form or format, your chosen words bring a reverie to our country’s brave who unselfishly died to protect our freedoms. Greatly enjoyed!
Thank you, sis! Love you bunches! ❤
i’m a fan of concrete poems and haven’t really tried to master this form, but have dabbled in it. thank you for the great message in yours today
Thank you, Beth!
Excellent poem! Your words remind us of the cost of our freedom. A reminder to pause, reflect, and thank those fallen soldiers. It also brings comfort to the families left behind, knowing someone cares enough about their hero to write poetry, and even better, from someone who served our country! I don’t know if I’ve ever thanked you for your service, but if I have, I’ll never stop, and if I haven’t, this is the first of many. I’m grateful, I’m in awe, and you’re my hero! Not just for what you’ve done, but for who you are! Much love, respect, and admiration! ❤
I’m also impressed by poems that are written to form a shape. I imagine it’s tricky. Thank you for sharing!
Thank you, Kristian! I am honored to have served the country I love, though I would not consider myself a hero. I am one of the lucky ones who got to come home.
The concrete form is tricky, but not from a writing stand point. It is just difficult to work with shapes in modern word processing software. A publishing software like MS Publisher, probably would make it much easier.
Thanks for all your kind words and love! ❤😘❤
A wonderful tribute both to the concrete form, as well as to our soldiers…
Thanks, Jim! When I was stationed in D.C., my barracks sat on the edge of Arlington Cemetery, and my room looked out over it.
what a great view that must have been…
This was very informative. Loved your poem. A beautiful tribute to soldiers.
Thank you, Shweta!
My pleasure 🙂
Definitely a challenge and quite a beautiful poem you wrote to emphasise today’s teaching! Great work Brad, really interesting this type of form!
Thank you, my friend!