Whittled Words – Streetbeatina Poem
Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:
STREETBEATINA POEM
A Paul Szlosek Original Form
First, I must thank Paul Szlosek for allowing me to cover this original form in my Whittled Words series. You can find his original post and many other delightful musings on his blog at Paul’s Poetry Playground. His series of quotations from prominent artists and poets was the inspiration for my own weekly series, Tuesday Tidbits. As the creator of the form, I will let Paul’s own words describe this creative and challenging form:
“A little more than a year ago, I published a post on the Streetbeatina, a poetry form I originally created to celebrate the fifth anniversary of the Street Beat, an amazing open poetry reading series that was run and hosted by Anne Marie Lucci, a talented local poet, in my hometown of Worcester, Massachusetts for many years.”
“The streetbeatina is an eight-line poem with each line consisting of eight syllables. What makes this form both a challenge to write and uniquely different from other forms is that the first syllable of the first line is repeated as the second syllable in the second line, the third syllable of the third line and so on, the repetition of the sound of the syllable at precise intervals providing the poem with a natural beat and musicality. Although it is completely optional, the poet can emphasize the repeated syllable by either printing it in italics, bold, or a different color.”
Examples of Streetbeatina Poems:
Three Streetbeatinas by Paul Szlosek *
Travel Advisory
By Paul Szlosek
Go unprepared into the world.
Forgo certainty. Pretend to
be cargo bound for distant ports
(perhaps the Gobi Desert? Mars?)
Travel by pogo stick or dreams,
a blank map: your logo. Treat the
unknown as your amigo. Or
ignore this advice, but go. Go!
A Message to a Married Middle-Aged Man
in Middle-Management in Mid-Life Crisis With Artistic Ambitions
By Paul Szlosek
So few chances to start over,
go solo, cover past mistakes
with gesso, paint a new version
of your life (sophisticated,
worldly, yet also real) like a
truly virtuoso artist
living in a loft in Soho.
to replace one that’s just so-so.
Ghost Story
By Paul Szlosek
Local legends say if you go
solo into the deep dark woods
when the lotus blossom first blooms,
and the moon’s low in the night sky,
the girl in yellow will appear,
her lips mouthing “Hello, my love”
while lunar light spills like lotion
on skin translucent as jello.
*(Originally published by Radius: Poetry From the Center to the Edge )
SEASIDE LOVE
By Brad Osborne
See what light doth hold in embrace
As sea flashes back a twinkling
Night in Seattle remembered
Where our love celestial sparkling
Heart leaps lunacy with such ease
Woven strong is the seamstress thread
Desires blow within sea breeze
And hope makes real the fantasy
I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Streetbeatina poem. Thanks for reading!
Your poem is fantastic! Loved it! Actually love that style, it is fun, creative and so different that it is something to strive to accomplish. Great series, great learning from your posts Brad. All the best!
Thanks, brother! It was a honor to highlight another artist you can find here in our community!
loved your poem, and i love the festive spirit of this poetry form
Paul is innovative, for sure. It was fun and very challenging. I am glad my words did justice to the form. Thanks, Beth! Have a great weekend!
I love this style, and your poem, & the Paul’s poems. Haha. I love everything!!
It was a kick to be able to share Paul’s invention and challenging to write to. Glad you enjoyed mine and thank you for your unwavering support. You are the best! 🥰
this looks like a fun, but challenging style. As usual. your example is right on target with a wonderful thoughts.
Thank you, Jim! It was fun to try the form. My biggest challenge was being anxious knowing the creator of the form may well read my words. I can only hope I have done his invention justice!
I am sure Paul is honored that you wrote such a wonderful poem in a form that he created.
Oh, I love this poem Brad. You are great.
“See what light doth hold in embrace
As sea flashes back a twinkling
Night in Seattle remembered
Where our love celestial sparkling”
WOW. Beautiful.
Have a great weekend.
Yours
G.
Thank you, Gabriela! Your words always lift me and bolster my desire to write. I hope you have a wonderful weekend full of beauty, peace, and love! 🌹
I have never heard of this before and boy it does not look easy although you certainly made it look easy Brad. Nicely done. I see how it has a bit of a beat, very creative. I also enjoyed Paul’s Streetbeatina poems. Great post Brad. Have an amazing weekend my friend. Love Jonikens
Thank you, Jonikins! It was a challenging write and an honor to highlight the work of another WP artist! You have a safe and lovely weekend too!
Oh I did not realize he was part of our community I will definitely follow him his work was very good. Complex writing but very good indeed. You have a blessed Sabbath. Love 💕 Jonikins
You will find a link to his blog in my post. Just click his name or blog name. Thank you, Joni!
My pleasure he is a great poet. Nice of you to host a guest it is how we get to know one another. Thanks Brad. Sending Saturday hugs with love. ❤️💕🤗 Jonikins