Whittled Words – Gogyohka Poem



Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:

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GOGYOHKA POEM

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Gogyohka was a form developed by Enta Kusakabe in Japan and translates literally to “five-line poem.” An offshoot of the tanka form, the gogyohka has very simple rules: The poem is comprised of five lines with one phrase per line. That’s it.

What constitutes a phrase in gogyohka?

 From the examples I’ve seen of the form, the definition of phrase is in the eye of the beholder. A compound or complex sentence is probably too long, but I’ve seen phrases as short as one word and others more than five words.

So, it’s a little loose, which is kind of the theory behind gogyohka. It’s meant to be concise (five lines) but free (variable line length with each phrase). No special seasonal or cutting words. No subject matter constraints. Just five lines of poetic phrases.

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Examples of Gogyohka Poems:

WONDERFUL

by Bhumphreys

Gentle Brunette curves
Over olive features
Frames subtle beauty
And God’s gift
I am breathless in your wake.

MASTER STROKE

By Walt Wojtanik

Autumn’s elves are artists.
They paint with broad brushes
through the trees and rushes they stroke
and evoke the colors to explode.
The mother lode; her palette full!

LUMP

By Marie Elena

 

Barely detectable –
Smaller
Than the one
Taking up residence
In her throat

ACRYLIC LIFE

By Brad Osborne

Vivid colors roar

With line and curve

A captured moment

In acrylic

Lives on the canvas

STRIVE

By Brad Osborne

 

 Be not lukewarm

Not tepid of mind

Shoot for the moon

Leave little behind

Grasp the brass ring

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I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Gogyohka poem. Thanks for reading!

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Comments
12 Responses to “Whittled Words – Gogyohka Poem”
  1. beth says:

    Yes, I like your go for it approach

  2. sudrakarma says:

    Interesting. The form evokes creative constraint and economy of words, yet immense freedom in within its tight boundaries. It’s like someone handing you the universe within a thimble. I think I need more coffee. ; P

  3. Francisco Bravo Cabrera says:

    Interesting…five lines, no other rules…have to say the examples were lovely and yours was brilliant, as acrylic colours tend to be…so, here it goes, this is my sample:

    “May they never close your favourite bar,
    Fish swim through the city streets as people passing by
    Raindrops seal the holes of all our yesterdays
    smoke from cigarettes I smoked so far away create a rainbow
    Bartender serve us two more dry martinis…”

    Love this series Brad, learning much from it and also loving the samples you write as well as those you provide from other poets.
    All the best,
    Francisco

  4. Jim Borden says:

    this seemed a bit easier than other forms you have tackled. I liked the inspirational nature of both your poems…

  5. Harley Reborn says:

    I read all your stuff in your voice now

  6. jonicaggiano says:

    Oh this seems a bit easier than some of your more difficult varieties Brad. I loved the example Lump and yours were splendid. Yours are almost always better than your examples. I love that Francisco wrote one too. How fun. You do work so hard to teach us new forms and methodology of writing poetry. Very kind of you Brad. You are so disciplined in your writing and I do so admire that. I like to read my favorites when no one is around and it is very quiet. Lovely words my friend. An encouraging spirit. Love ❤️ and hugs 🤗. Jonikins

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