Whittled Words – Lai Poem
Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:
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LAI POEM
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The lai is another French form. It is a nine-line poem or stanza that uses an “a” and “b” rhyme following this pattern: aabaabaab. The lines with an “a” rhyme use 5 syllables; the “b” rhyme lines have 2 syllables. It feels kind of like an organized skeltonic verse. Here is a visual representation of the form:
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Although somewhat restrictive in its form, there is a rhythmic beauty here that can lead to some powerful phrasing. Also, the use on near rhymes or slant rhymes can help if the rhyme scheme becomes a hurdle.
My research has shown that this style has morphed through the ages to include, “Lai Breton”, which is a lyrical, narrative poem written in octosyllabic couplets that often deals with tales of adventure and romance, and the “Virelai” with variable forms most often set to music and thus written in a number of bars with a refrain. For this entry, we will stick to this earliest form.
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Examples of Lai Poems:
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MISTLETOE
By Lawrencealot
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Hang the mistletoe
tie it with a bow
then wait.
You’re aware, I know
You just use it though
for bait.
It’s most apropos
how it works, with no
debate.
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UNTITLED
By nogginquest
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Are you really there?
So kind and so fair
I dream
Your vison is near
So strong and so clear
It seems
You stand by me here
And banish my fear
Serene
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HIDDEN PAIN
By Catherine Wilson
For years, I have tried
to hide pain inside
of me.
Call it stubborn pride.
Really I’ve denied
the plea.
Strong on the outside
my heart truly cried
a sea.
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IN THE QUIET TIMES
By Brad Osborne
Life is not a race
A metronomed pace
Sheer will
Find your happy place
Worries there erase
Hope fill
Nothing left to chase
A natural grace
Be still
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I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Lai poem. Thanks for reading!
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I do like the rhythm of these –
It is lyrical is it not? I have to admit, this was certainly a challenge meeting line length. Thanks for all the support, Beth!
“Be still.” Aye! There’s the rub! Lovely example of this type of poetry which is very interesting and very expressive. I like it! Great post my friend! Have a lovely Friday and a great weekend!
All the best to you,
FBC.
Thank you brother…enjoy your weekend as well! Cheers!
You’re very welcome my brother!
This looks challenging, but as always, you nailed it!
Thank you pretty lady! It was a challenge for sure. The syllabic limitations and rhyme scheme make it stretch. Thank you for thinking mine was good, but I think the others I shared are much better. Stay well, be loved!
like Beth, I like the pattern and rhyme of this poem.
and I like the message of your poem – we are all trying to find our happy place…
Woosah…