Whittled Words – Rime Couee Poem
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Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:
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RIME COUEE POEM
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The Rime Couee is a French poetic form that uses six-line stanzas with a 3-part rhyme scheme and variable line lengths. It is a tail-rhymed verse form of 12th century Provencal troubadours. Though it originated in France, it is thought to be the predecessor of the more popular Scot form, the Burns Stanza.
Here are the guidelines:
- Six-line stanzas.
- Eight syllables in lines one, two, four, and five.
- Six syllables in the third and sixth lines.
- Rhyme scheme of AABCCB.
The poem can be a single stanza or run for several. In the examples below, you will see variations of line length but a consistent structure of two longer lines followed by a shorter line. As with any art, this falls well within artistic license.
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Examples of Rime Couee Poems:
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JOSEPH’S LIGHTHOUSE
By Lawrencealot
When Old Man Winter struts his stuff
to show that he is good enough
he paints in white.
Unlike the art-work done by Spring
where colors touch most everything
pastel or bright.
His canvass can be anything
a bridge a tree, an old coil spring
that’s left outside.
St. Joseph lighthouse shown above
received full measure of his love.
I’m satisfied.
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DREAM SONG #112
By John Berryman
My framework is broken, I am coming to an end,
God send it soon. When I had most to say
my tongue clung to the roof
I mean of my mouth. It is my Lady’s birthday
which must be honored, and has been. God send
it soon.
I now must speak to my disciples, west
and east. I say to you, Do not delay
I say, expectation is vain.
I say again, It is my Lady’s birthday
which must be honoured. Bring her to the test
at once.
I say again, It is my Lady’s birthday
which must be honoured, for her high black hair
but not for that alone:
for every word she utters everywhere
shows her good soul, as true as a healed bone,—
being part of what I meant to say.
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ONE MORE DAY
By Brad Osborne
Sun has worn away and night calls
I sit alone within these walls
Here the remains all gray
And rest these oh so weary eyes
Hopeful to open with sunrise
If I but have my way
For tho’ this day was good to live
I think that I have more to give
More I was meant to say
There is something left inside me
That may still offer some beauty
I just need one more day
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I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Rime Couee poem. Thanks for reading!
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I like the six line set up and yes, at least one more day
Thank you, Beth! One of my favorite forms.
A most interesting form of poetry, one that can easily lead towards some very insightful writing. Great example you provided, all of them. Cheers my friend.
Thank you, Francisco! Though tricky with its syllabic count, the rhyme scheme is classic and lends itself to lyrical writing.
You’re very welcome Brad, and you are so right on the lyrical writing with this style.
I like the poem all gray you tell
And I like the others, as well
But there’s one thing makes me curse
Though I have but myself to blame
And that’s the time it takes to write this verse
When I could be resting my brain
Now that is a lovely piece of poetry. Thank, you, mistermuse!
yes, one more day, one day at a time…
Thank you, Jim!
This is my Anthem!
Thanks, Geoff! You are the best!
I really liked the first one and yours of course. Yours as well as the first one read beautifully smooth and I loved the musicality of the form.
This was so lovely Brad:
“For tho’ this day was good to live
I think that I have more to give
More I was meant to say
There is something left inside me
That may still offer some beauty
I just need one more day”
Sending you big hugs, blessings and a beautiful woman who has lost her way on the road. You offer her tea and read her a poem and start a lovely fire and she never leaves. Love ❤️ Jonikins
Thank you, Jonikins! Between the syllabic meter and rhyme scheme, you are left with something that usually reads well. I keep an eye out for lost women!
I bet you do my friend. Maybe a beacon on the house would help. My prayers for you are being heard. We never know the answer but if it is God’s will he is listen and he will bring you someone in his time. Have an amazing week. Love Jonikins ❤️🤗🦋