Whittled Words – Luc Bat Poem


Welcome to the weekly series, Whittled Words. A series highlighting the innumerable types and styles of poetry to challenge any creative wordsmith. This week’s selection:




The Luc Bat is a Vietnamese poetic form that means “six-eight.” In fact, the poem consists of alternating lines of six and eight syllables. This poem is interesting in its rhyme scheme that renews at the end of every eight-syllable line and rhymes on the sixth syllable of both lines.

Here is a diagram of the rhyme scheme and line lengths:


And so on. Luc bat poems have no set length or subject matter, and some run on for thousands of lines.


Examples of Luc Bat Poems:



by R J Clarken


I heard a note…then more.
It soon became a score. It rose
and grew. Would one suppose
those notes are just for those who hear
that magic flute? Unclear.
But still…I know when ‘ere it’s played
I’d march in its parade:
its song can never fade. A note…



By J. Lynn Sheridan


What love is this that night
delays our secret flight into
lost passion? I’ll hold you
until sorrows are few and faint,
until tears of joy paint
chains of hearts into quaint embrace.
Then, with sigh and pearled lace,
we’ll soar high upon love’s grace toward
ancient dreams. Over fjord
and vale to claim reward—a song
of gold, a ring of strong
desire where we belong as one.



By Taylor Graham


Look at him, pup who lived
in a crate, his life sieved through wire.
What does a dog desire
but to let the bright fire of sun,
wind, earth stir him, to run
to the horizon? One new friend
to lead, to tug the end
of leash, to make it bend; to fly.
The two of them dash by
so happy under sky, alive.



By Brad Osborne

Even the smallest spark

Is all you need to start the fire

The burning of desire

A rampant, raging pyre for one

And in the ashes won

An eternal flame undone by

Any self-serving lie

Or wretched alibi, false heart

That tears the fire apart

And bids the love to start to die


I hope you have enjoyed this entry to the series, Whittled Words. I look forward to your comments, and if you dare, maybe share your own Luc Bat poem. Thanks for reading!


14 Responses to “Whittled Words – Luc Bat Poem”
  1. beth says:

    this form does make for an interesting cadence when read aloud, and yours has such a sad ending

  2. A very good form indeed Brad! Who knows, maybe I’ll try it!

  3. kristianw84 says:

    I like this form. Your poem is sad but true.

  4. Shashi says:

    Interesting format. “The smallest spark “ is the one I loved the most.

  5. jonicaggiano says:

    I love the rhythm and rhyme to this style Brad. As usual I prefer your poem to the example. The poems a little bit sad, forlornness mixing with love. Beautiful writing. Have a wonderful week Jonikins. ❤️🦋

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